Clanking and grinding, the space-age aluminum invention walked clumsily across the playground. The children screamed in shock as the 7- foot robot opened it’s metallic jaws and spoke.
“Greetings!
6R-Creative-Writing
Here is some writing from OLOL: Class 6R
I really like the descriptive language you used I also like the adjectives you put in for the robots teet
I’m sorry I mean’t feet. 🙂
You could improve it by using similies.
Mr Rodney I like the way you used adjectives to describe the robot;I think you could use a adverb like anxiously or dangerously so I could snag that word space-age aluminum invention in my writing Thank you Mr Rodney!
A very good description
great onomatopoeia and powerful verbs mr rodney
These are the type of comments I like to see- well done everyone!
I want to read your creative writing!
At the bottom of the main page or where it says + New at the top you can write your own.
I loved the onamatapia, wow words and visual desciption.
I meant onomatopoeia and visual description 🙂
love your descriptive writing wish you could use adverbs and more writing to make it more in treeing
I really like how you used your adjectives.
You can improve it by using verbs