The boy walked up the scary garden path. He felt scared. He came to the front door. He was very scared. He opened the door and he walked inside and he was very very scared. There was blood on the walls and there was a ghost and he was very scared and he ran away and he never came back again.
6R-Creative-Writing
Here is some writing from OLOL: Class 6R
Can you rewrite my story making as many improvements as you can? You can change it however you like.
The nervous boy walked up the heart pounding garden path (were towered over him) bloodcurdling fear filled his spirit! He came to the hair raising front door with the door number smeared with blood of other adventurous children like himself. He opened the door he walked through the door where lights flicked when he parts and lights sprinkle with fire like fireworks on News Years Eve. He walked through the spine chilling house. He viewed things he will never forget. Things that will give you nightmares,he viewed things that will make you not want to be on your own such as; rotten dead bodies, demon filled people and evil sprits floating in the atmosphere!
But the adventurous little boys story had only began…..
that a good story keep the good work up 🙂
rodrigo